I’m writing a song for my ex woman, here’s what I got so far. I need some advice though… have a read and tell me…. Is it a bad idea to remind her that I ignored her and treated her like s*** before I got locked away?

“Life is one big party when you’re still young
But who’s gonna have your back when it’s all done (Yeah)
It’s all good when you’re little, you have pure fun
Can’t be a fool, son, what about the long run?
Looking back shorty always ah mention
Said me not giving her much attention (Yeah)
She was there through my incarceration
I wanna show the nation my appreciation”

I’m white btw. Is it too black? Foolish? I was going to sing it in an irritating nassally sounding tone. From my nose rather than from my gut.